Wednesday, 3 February 2016

Will you be my tomb?

Blue like my thoughts
Deep like my remorse
Your incessant roar
Like my emotions gone hoarse

Cold like my heart
Vast like my delusions  
Your recurrent crashing waves
Like my imminent apprehensions

Hollow like my chest
Wild like my fears
Your bottomless water
Like my salty grey tears


Dear Ocean,
Engulf me like wildfire
Will you be my tomb?
I seem to be tired
Let me rest in your womb!



For The Tuesday Platform at Real Toads


30 comments:

  1. Oh, my! Don't do it! You're young! You still have your whole life ahead of you! ANd you write great verse!

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    1. Thank you for the appreciation. Yes, not planning to do it :)

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  2. I echo Mosk........your story is only beginning. Great verse.

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    1. Sarkari babu is the hindi word for a Government Officer, Moskowitz :)

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  4. Jyotsna, this is one of the best poems which I have ever read girl.
    Beautifully penned!

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    1. Thank you so much dear. Always glad to see you here. Lots of love back :)

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  5. Last para is so amazing - makes me want to sleep in the lap of nature!

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    1. Thank you Alok ! Yep, indeed a good thing to do.

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  6. Last stanza, mahn! Great piece, Jyotsna!

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    1. Lovely to have you here Aathira. Thank you :)

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  8. Beautifully penned, Jyotsna. Who wouldn't want rest in nature's womb. :)

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    1. Thank you Vinitha. Glad you liked my words

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  9. the lines are beautiful and meaningful...loved it :)

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  10. Liked the usage of simile and the deeper reflections.

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  11. Beautiful lines... mesmerizing...
    Cheers, Archana - www.drishti.co

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  12. Beautiful and lyrical. Loved it!

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  13. Ocean dreams
    of old goNe..
    so blue
    so deep
    so cOld
    daRk
    blue
    one
    sInks..
    Oceans emerald
    glow in gulf..
    so shallow
    yet
    deep
    in life's
    row now oF
    yeLLow sUn..:)

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