Wednesday, 3 February 2016

Will you be my tomb?

Blue like my thoughts
Deep like my remorse
Your incessant roar
Like my emotions gone hoarse

Cold like my heart
Vast like my delusions  
Your recurrent crashing waves
Like my imminent apprehensions

Hollow like my chest
Wild like my fears
Your bottomless water
Like my salty grey tears


Dear Ocean,
Engulf me like wildfire
Will you be my tomb?
I seem to be tired
Let me rest in your womb!



For The Tuesday Platform at Real Toads


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29 comments:

  1. Buddah Moskowitz4 February 2016 at 00:15

    Oh, my! Don't do it! You're young! You still have your whole life ahead of you! ANd you write great verse!

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    1. Jyotsna Bhatia9 December 2016 at 00:22

      Thank you for the appreciation. Yes, not planning to do it :)

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  2. Sherry Blue Sky4 February 2016 at 01:25

    I echo Mosk........your story is only beginning. Great verse.

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  3. Buddah Moskowitz4 February 2016 at 02:59

    And what is a sarkari babu?

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    1. Jyotsna Bhatia9 December 2016 at 00:23

      Sarkari babu is the hindi word for a Government Officer, Moskowitz :)

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  4. Sanaa Rizvi4 February 2016 at 05:15

    Jyotsna, this is one of the best poems which I have ever read girl.
    Beautifully penned!

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    1. Jyotsna Bhatia9 December 2016 at 00:24

      Thank you so much dear. Always glad to see you here. Lots of love back :)

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  5. Alok singhal4 February 2016 at 06:25

    Last para is so amazing - makes me want to sleep in the lap of nature!

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    1. Jyotsna Bhatia9 December 2016 at 00:24

      Thank you Alok ! Yep, indeed a good thing to do.

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  6. Aayesha S Hakim4 February 2016 at 09:09

    Last stanza, mahn! Great piece, Jyotsna!

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  7. Kerry O'Connor4 February 2016 at 09:42

    This is a great lyrical poem.

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  8. Aathira4 February 2016 at 15:00

    This is breathtaking <3

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  9. Vinitha5 February 2016 at 12:24

    Beautifully penned, Jyotsna. Who wouldn't want rest in nature's womb. :)

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  10. Ankita 5 February 2016 at 20:19

    the lines are beautiful and meaningful...loved it :)

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  11. Chaitali Bhattacharjee6 February 2016 at 23:58

    Liked the usage of simile and the deeper reflections.

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  12. Unknown7 February 2016 at 09:39

    Beautiful lines... mesmerizing...
    Cheers, Archana - www.drishti.co

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  13. Rat8 February 2016 at 10:47

    Beautiful and lyrical. Loved it!

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  14. Katie Mia Frederick8 February 2016 at 14:48

    Ocean dreams
    of old goNe..
    so blue
    so deep
    so cOld
    daRk
    blue
    one
    sInks..
    Oceans emerald
    glow in gulf..
    so shallow
    yet
    deep
    in life's
    row now oF
    yeLLow sUn..:)

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  15. Jyotsna Bhatia9 December 2016 at 00:23

    Thank you Audrey :)

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