bridge
of hope it once was
love,
dreams and happiness
blossomed
on its path
blossomed
on its path
brought
togetherness to life
new
moon day it was
new
moon day it was
she
never knew, that its light
would
drain, drop by drop
would
drain, drop by drop
leaving
traces of darkness
below
her cold feet
below
her cold feet
turns
that bridge
into
cemetery of feelings
Written
for Carpe Diem # 555 - CEMETERY
drying tears
ReplyDeletetombstone letters -
a cold draft
Good one Bjorn :)
DeletePervasive sadness!
ReplyDeleteNext to Your Tombstone
Yep !!
DeleteLoved how you used the prompt ... awesome :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Sinha :)
DeleteThis is really a refreshing, new style - a whole saga in haiku, poetical, with patterns that are worth taking in slowly. Found this really powerful.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Hamish. Glad you liked this :)
DeleteVery nice chain of haiku --
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteBeautiful
ReplyDeleteThank you Ankur :)
DeleteA skilled weave of haiku, braiding a path from bridge to cemetary.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much :)
Deletei enjoyed the the piece as a whole storyline
ReplyDeletegracias for sharing
Glad you liked this Marcoantonio. Welcome to my blog :)
Deletethat was a bit sad for me .. but a beautiful haiku as it made a impact on me
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Thank you Bikram :)
Deletehaunting, moody - beautiful linking haiku
ReplyDeleteBeautiful Jyo! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks babes :)
Deletebeautiful and filled with sorrow too.
ReplyDeleteGlad to have you here Laura. Thank you :)
Deletebeautiful yet sad!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Arushi :)
DeleteVery potent haiku string
ReplyDeleteMuch love...
Thanks Gillena :)
DeleteNice form and contrasts.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Glad to have you here :)
DeleteOh dear--you use your form well to get to the inevitability of all of this. One thing leading to next. k.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much :)
DeleteYou interwove your lines with great style.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry. Glad you liked my work here :)
Deleteloved how you went with it..Beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThanks babes !
DeleteAll of them are done well.
ReplyDeleteA nice read.
Thank you Indrani :)
DeleteVery poignant lines full of emotions.
ReplyDeleteThank you Usha Ma'am :)
DeleteBeautiful lines
ReplyDeleteThanks Chaitali :)
DeletePowerful n different take, Jyotsna
ReplyDeleteThanks Vishal :)
DeleteStrong and INtense !
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it Ananya :)
DeleteHi Jyotsna,
ReplyDeleteFeeling good to read your words here after many days... Nice Haiku, it was like how I feel after reading 'Zen' stories.. There is a lot to feel but the narration is cold as if free of all of them... Feeling that 'free of all' feeling... I cannot stop telling again that your words have a lot of power...
TC! keep smiling :)
Sindhu, you overwhelm me with your comments every time. They make me smile for days together. Thanks a lot for being so kind with your words. Lots of love :)
Delete"she never knew, that its light would drain, drop by drop"... it touched where it hurts!
ReplyDeleteIt sure does hurt, Vijai Sir !!
DeleteA little sad but loved how you gently moved from feeling to feeling. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Saru. Glad you liked the feelings I have woven here :)
DeleteAn excellent set of haiku...love the way you've wandered along with the feeling...
ReplyDeleteThanks Maniparna :)
DeleteLoved the way you meandered around feelings.Please do accept my nomination for an award http://ilakshee.blogspot.in/2014/09/my-award.html.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ilakshee for your kind words about the haiku and also for the award :) :)
DeleteBeautiful lines...
ReplyDeleteThank you Noopur :)
DeleteVery powerful read! Full of imagery. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Elsie :)
Deletecemetery of feelings...How did u even come up with that. wow~
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked this, Red :)
DeleteP.S- This is just to tell u that m back. :P
ReplyDeleteP.S. - Welcome back sweetheart ;)
DeleteExcellent with a dash of melancholy.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteBeautiful. Have just started writing Haiku but yours seems so effortless :) Good one!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for the 'effortless' comment :) Welcome to the haiku loving community. I should go and check yours :)
DeleteYou understood it correctly Ashwini.. The haiku was written keeping in mind the loss of someone !!
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