Flow
of
darkness
Like
ashes in my veins
Black
is what I see
Death
of something
I foresee
I foresee
Doused
fire within
Now
lies in its icy state
There
was a wait
For
A
hand to hold
Someone
to hear
Silent
cries
Of
this soul
And
I realize
Only
me
Has
the power to pull myself
Out
of any abyss
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Written
for Words Count with Mama Zen over at toads where we had to pick a few words
from the “ultraconserved words” list as stated below and write a poem of 60 words or less.
Thou,
I, Not, that, we, to give, who, this, what, man / male, ye, old, mother, to,
hear, hand, fire, to pull, black, to flow, bark, ashes, to spit, worm
Another can walk alongside but only you have the power to decide to get out of the abyss. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteYep.. Thank you :)
DeleteI really like your word choices. Really well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you :) Glad you liked this one.
DeleteProfound thoughts, beautiful (if dark) images.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ma'am !
DeleteThe realization that you are left to rise from darkness only by yourself is so hard.. there should always be a helping hand.
ReplyDeleteAgreed. That realization is very difficult. We are always looking for support. But I guess nobody except you yourself can be of greatest help.
DeleteIt's profound! Poignant I must say..!
ReplyDeleteYet again, amazing piece of your work!
Cheers
Thank you Geetika. You are too kind with your words.
DeleteVery true. We do hold the key to our own happiness and peace. Powerful message. Nicely done, Jyotsna. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Shanaya.
DeleteTrue ! Absolutely agree with the core thought of this poem. No one but we ourselves have the power to tread through difficult times and come out successfully.
ReplyDeleteI have nominated you for the 3 Day Quote Challenge at Emotions Xpressed
Thank you Salvwi. Glad to have you here. Let me go and see the challenge. Thanks for nominating :)
DeleteVery true, true happiness comes from within
ReplyDeleteYup it does.
DeleteWhoa! Amazing depiction of feelings using the words. Great job Jyotsna!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteGreat one Jyotsna !! A truth so well said , well presented .
ReplyDeleteThanks Kokila. Glad you liked it.
DeleteTruth of life... Beautifully expressed!
ReplyDeleteThanks Noopur. Glad to have you here.
DeleteOnly the awareness at the bottom of the pit gives the strength to pull oneself out.
ReplyDeleteWell said Brendan :)
DeleteWhere have you been!!
ReplyDeleteAh, just lost in the whirlwind somewhere, babes. But feels glad to be back :)
DeleteWell written!
ReplyDeleteThank you dear :)
Deleteit was amazing!
ReplyDeleteThank you Gautam :)
DeleteWhat a powerful poem, Jyotsna:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Vishal :)
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