Saturday, 27 June 2015

Doused Fire

Flow of darkness
Like ashes in my veins
Black is what I see
Death of something 
I foresee
Doused fire within
Now lies in its icy state
There was a wait
For
A hand to hold
Someone to hear
Silent cries
Of this soul
And I realize
Only me
Has the power to pull myself
Out of any abyss

Image Source : Google 



Written for Words Count with Mama Zen over at toads where we had to pick a few words from the “ultraconserved words” list as stated below and write a poem of 60 words or less.

Thou, I, Not, that, we, to give, who, this, what, man / male, ye, old, mother, to, hear, hand, fire, to pull, black, to flow, bark, ashes, to spit, worm




32 comments:

  1. Another can walk alongside but only you have the power to decide to get out of the abyss. Nicely done.

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  2. I really like your word choices. Really well done.

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    1. Thank you :) Glad you liked this one.

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  3. Profound thoughts, beautiful (if dark) images.

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  4. The realization that you are left to rise from darkness only by yourself is so hard.. there should always be a helping hand.

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    1. Agreed. That realization is very difficult. We are always looking for support. But I guess nobody except you yourself can be of greatest help.

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  5. It's profound! Poignant I must say..!
    Yet again, amazing piece of your work!

    Cheers

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    1. Thank you Geetika. You are too kind with your words.

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  6. Very true. We do hold the key to our own happiness and peace. Powerful message. Nicely done, Jyotsna. :)

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  7. True ! Absolutely agree with the core thought of this poem. No one but we ourselves have the power to tread through difficult times and come out successfully.

    I have nominated you for the 3 Day Quote Challenge at Emotions Xpressed

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    1. Thank you Salvwi. Glad to have you here. Let me go and see the challenge. Thanks for nominating :)

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  8. Very true, true happiness comes from within

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  9. Whoa! Amazing depiction of feelings using the words. Great job Jyotsna!

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  10. Great one Jyotsna !! A truth so well said , well presented .

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  11. Truth of life... Beautifully expressed!

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    1. Thanks Noopur. Glad to have you here.

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  12. Only the awareness at the bottom of the pit gives the strength to pull oneself out.

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    1. Ah, just lost in the whirlwind somewhere, babes. But feels glad to be back :)

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