Sip by Sip
Drop
by Drop
You
drain me, You strain me
I
talk, I blabber
I
go on a rampage of meaningless chatter
A
part of me nestles within you
I
somehow now settle within you
Sip
by Sip
Drop
by Drop
You
drain me, You strain me
Pouring myself out
I
feel emptied without a doubt
Happiness,
Worries, Hopes and Fears
I
almost even showed you my tears
Sip
by Sip
Drop
by Drop
You
drain me, You strain me
Vulnerable
I so feel
My
brokenness before you I peeled
Past
fears grow up as I let my guards go down
Damn!
I sometimes end up feeling like a clown
Sip
by Sip
Drop
by Drop
You
drain me, You strain me
I
fear you would know me
I
fear you would grow upon me
Raw,
unguarded you make me feel
Everytime
I talk; everytime with you I deal
Sip
by Sip
Drop
by Drop
You
drain me, You strain me
Alas! a part of you never walked upto me
Your
guards I know are harder than steel
I
wish I could learn that from you
How
you never give anybody a feeblest clue
Mystery
I prefer to remain
My
aloofness I wish to sustain
My
own intentions you make me doubt
Of
my own shackles you make me want to break out
Sip
by Sip
Drop
by Drop
I
see myself getting drained out !!
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Simple words, but, very meaningful poem Jyotsna! I am not good at commenting on any poem, I just loved the way you played with the words :)
ReplyDeleteTC! Keep smiling :) Happy writing :)
Whatever you say Sindhu, your words are very encouraging. Thank you for being here every time I put up something. Lots of Love :) :)
DeleteWhat a beautiful poem! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you Saru :)
DeleteVery beautiful! I like the rhythm you infused with 'Sip by sip and drop by drop'!
ReplyDeleteThank you Shailaja. Glad you liked it :)
DeleteWow!! That was awesome!! I loved the flow of the poem, the way it unfolded!
ReplyDeleteThank you Nibha :)
DeleteSo many emotions up there. Beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeletePossessive & obsessive
ReplyDeleteHope you liked the poem Sir :)
DeleteFull of emotions, Jyotsna.
ReplyDeleteThank you Usha Ma'am :)
DeleteLove how you brought out so many emotions! Beautiful! :)
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it :)
DeleteWOW! Love has multifold emotions indeed :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Aayesha :)
DeleteWhen we start the sipping we cannot do anything but fail to communicate.. alas, Amor is a devious bastard
ReplyDeleteAh and being sipped is a worst feeling !!
DeleteAh, love shouldn't drain it should fill, fulfill. You have written very well of one sided love.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I guess its not just love.. it's the sadness of every one sided relationship where one person keeps on pouring themselves out and the other one doesnt respond.
Deletesadness drips from every word....nice write :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sumana :)
DeleteAwesome poem ... emotions so well described ... why the hell can't I write like this? :(
ReplyDeleteThank you Sinha.. And you can't write like this coz you write much much better poetry than what I write !!
DeleteThis piece vividly illustrates an incredibly intense connection.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kim. Glad you liked it :)
Deletebrilliant piece, jyotsna.. so much of emotions. so much of beauty.. loved it.. hugs!
ReplyDeleteThanks darling.. Hugs back :) :)
DeleteI would run, not walk, away from a person who drained me. Nothing good can come......
ReplyDeleteAh, well.. yeah one could up their guards as well and not let people sip through them !
Deleteall emotions drained out
ReplyDeleteAh yes.. !!
Deletei would prefer a mystery as well...there comes a time when all the draining leaves you rather empty....this too i know...
ReplyDeleteOh yes.. the emptiness !!
DeleteAt first I read as if a person was with a psychiatrist in the talking cure, but as the poem progressed, I began to see the betrayal as the listener refuses to open. So much given, too much taken away before we realize it isn't reciprical. I'd rather be a mystery too. I never thought of this before. Maybe it's why I rarely let myself be vulnerable.
ReplyDeleteYou have pointed out very well Susan about the betrayal because of the other person not opening up! Well.. being mystery is fine unless the other person doesn't feel emptied because of pouring out !!
Deletei like the rhythm the poem has.. an in the end i am reminded of all those relationships which seem to drain that energy right out.
ReplyDeleteThanks Natasa. Glad you liked this one :)
DeleteI guess our guards are there for a reason. Trust is a major requirement for them to come down. Because you wrote of drips and drops I thought of drinking alcohol as something that relaxes those inhibitions, those parts of ouselves we prefer to keep inside especially when the listener does not share any of him or herself.
ReplyDeleteYep, guards are there for a reason but I guess they shouldn't be there in front of people who are open to you. And yes, alcohol does bring out our inhibited selves. Thanks for visiting Myrna :)
DeleteI love the repetition of the lines..it has given a nice pace to the rhythm..wonderful..:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Maniparna :)
DeleteThis reminds me of the angst that can occur in unequal relationships - very well described.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry :)
DeleteVery powerful imagery. Feeling like you are losing yourself is never fun. Well written.
ReplyDeleteYes, how can losing ourselves be fun?? Thank you. Glad you liked it :)
DeleteLove does that to you.
ReplyDeleteUmm.. I would say, not necessarily only love does that to you !!
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