Wednesday, 16 July 2014

Drive - Haiku

striving I have been
to drive myself away, from
your numerous thoughts

your numerous thoughts
clinging tight under my skin
not letting me breathe

not letting me breathe
I choke on our memories
they refuse to fade

they refuse to fade
and you cascade inside me
wounding me again

wounding me again
yet, it's driving me nearer
to my past in you




Written for Haiku Horizons Prompt # 21DRIVE

22 comments:

  1. Hah!! Loved the cascade. I see that you have used my technique here and the result is mind blowing! :)

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  2. past seems to get best out of us sometime ! wonder as always :)

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    1. Yes, it does. Thank you so much Ankur :)

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  3. Jyotsna,, you have beautifully depicted how old memories come gushing by.

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    1. Thank you Usha Ma'am. Glad you liked this one !!

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  4. Nostalgia and pain at their best...

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  5. Yes, I was reminded of Soumya's haikus here. You have done a brilliant job. Each one strikes a chord in me. Loved it, Jyotsna!

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  6. wow ! passionate cascade of drives ! tou are really inspired Jyotsna !

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    1. Your words make me smile. Thank you so much :)

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  7. I think Nostalgia is overrated. But people find a solace when they hit rock bottom.
    I think you should have a look at this website's article too:
    http://adviceadda.com/read-article/44-boys-who-write-girls-read

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    1. Ah, well it depends on perspectives. Will read the article you have suggested. Thanks for visiting !!

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  8. This was lovely...the way you captured the emotion..nostalgia....loved it.

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  9. Love the idea of thoughts clinging under your skin. Great image. But some nostalgia needs to be kept at skin deep for sanity. Delightful cascade of haiku.

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    1. Hi Gemma. Welcome to my space. Glad you liked my words. And yes, you are absolutely correct, nostalgia needs to be kept skin deep for sanity !!

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  10. I love how you say, choke on your memories! This is too good! :)

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