Wednesday, 4 February 2015

Maze of Life - 100 words


She saw her three year old daughter Meera's twinkling eyes when she told about visiting a new garden. Meera's happiness knew no bounds on seeing colourful rides all around. 'Let's play and see who reaches the end first' she told her daughter pointing towards the garden maze. She sent her daughter from one end while she took another one. Later, she saw her child giggling and enjoying in the maze while she tiptoed her way out of the garden with tears streaming down her face. She knew that if she looked back, she wouldn’t have the courage to do it.





Written for the photo prompt for this week's Friday Fictioneers
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17 comments:

  1. Sandra Crook4 February 2015 at 22:15

    Now that is seriously heart-breaking.

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  2. Ankita 5 February 2015 at 00:06

    very touching, made me a bit sad :(

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  3. Unknown5 February 2015 at 01:32

    That's very sad. Something terrible is happening here. Well portrayed.

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  4. Midnight scribbles5 February 2015 at 11:31

    Aww, dang it! How could she :(

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  5. Red Handed5 February 2015 at 11:37

    Oh my God Noooooooooooooooooooo... :(

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  6. Vinay Leo R.5 February 2015 at 15:26

    But why she had to leave her? So sad. :(

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  7. Michaelsfishbowl5 February 2015 at 18:44

    I finished this and said out loud, "No, don't do it!" I'm sad now and me feeling sad and me talking out loud to myself are good things and evidence of a good writer.

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  8. Aayesha S Hakim5 February 2015 at 23:03

    Heart breaking :(

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  9. Unknown5 February 2015 at 23:40

    But why??? :(

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  10. Priceless Joy6 February 2015 at 02:20

    I hope you can continue this next week, otherwise we are all going to be in a serious depression.

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  11. Dawn6 February 2015 at 04:04

    That's horrible. Imagine the child's panic. She does not deserve to be a mother.

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  12. plaridel6 February 2015 at 05:21

    such a sad story. i couldn't imagine a mother abandoning her daughter like that.

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  13. eLPy6 February 2015 at 06:56

    Ooo, you got me! I was following along on this playful, lovely story of a mother and her child. It seemed like the perfect day and then...bam!! Nice setup and overall story even if it is tragic. I had to go back through it to make sure I wasn't missing something!

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  14. Amrita Sabat6 February 2015 at 09:05

    Nice one. Can't understand y no courage. Was she blind?

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  15. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields6 February 2015 at 14:31

    Dear Jyotsna,

    Why on earth would she do this? Well written.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  16. Gail7 February 2015 at 03:15

    Well done.

    I hope the mother had no choice.

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  17. Anonymous7 February 2015 at 06:10

    How heart-breaking. Why would she leave her?

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