Wednesday, 6 November 2013

Grass - A Haiku

Carpet laid, Mother!
Lush, soft, beautiful it is
Bare feet, feel beneath





This post is shared with Haiku Heights and the prompt is GRASS. 
P.S. - This is my first attempt at creating a Haiku.


23 comments:

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    1. Hi Veena, welcome to my space. And thank you for your wishes :)

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    1. Hey Indrani, so sweet of you to read and comment evrytime I write. Really appreciate it :)

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  3. Simple yet very beautifully written!:)
    Well put Jyotsna!:)
    Lovely haiku indeed!:D

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    1. Hi Nikhil, thank you for your kind words <3 <3

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    2. & you are on the right track btw..:D
      Din't feel as if this is your first attempt. I am no pro at haikus but trust me, this is really good!:)
      Keep up the good work Jyotsna!:)

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    3. Haha.. Thank you for saying I am on right track ;) You are being so kind with your words Nikhil !! Btw, just read your first attempt at haiku, and looking to the love you have receivd, you didnt look like a first timer as well :)

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  4. Well done Jyotsna. Very nice first attempt. Keep it up!

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  5. nicely written for the prompt and depiction to mother earth as well :)

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    1. Glad you liked it Saurabh.. Thanks for reading and commenting :)

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  6. Nicely done Jyothsna, the feeling of soft grass beneath your feet is heavenly...

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    1. Indeed Reshma, that's a heavenly feeling. Glad you liked it !!

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  7. Loved your haiku. A nice ode to Mother Earth and I love the feel of bare feet on the earth. Thanks for visiting my blog.

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    1. Thanks for dropping in Suzy. Glad to have you here too :)

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  8. Loved your maiden attempt at haiku. Nature lays a green carpet for us.

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  9. its an eco haiku, jyotsna. its the human steps on the carpet that spoils it. as an architect i would say that the concrete jungle spoils the carpet. may be your next haiku could be concrete jungle... while u write sitting within the jungle of files in your office.

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    1. Yes, Niravbhai, agree with you.. concrete jungle in a way spoils beautiful natural carpet.. And as for the jungle of files in my office, now since you have given me the wonderful idea, I think I should be writing about it soon.. By the way, haven't seen you around in some time.. Do visit that jungle of files for some chai :)

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