‘Why are you looking so pissed off?’ she said trying to fathom the reason behind his cranky behavior since past half an hour sitting at their favourite restaurant.
‘It’s
you who does that to me’ he replied with a stern face looking straight into her
eyes.
‘Yes,
You! you keep me awake with your phone calls late into the night, your messages
keep on popping up on my cell every now and then, your incessant chatter when
we meet, and then your stupid ways of making me smile when I am down, and I
have to drink all that distasteful soup of yours that you make whenever I am
sick, and how can I forget those handmade gifts that you make me for no reason
inspite of telling you a hundred times to not spend sleepless nights for making
those gifts, but you just won’t listen.’ He said in one breath as if the words
were just bursting inside him.
‘Rahul,
I just do that to..’ and her sentence trailed off with a lump in her throat and
she looked mindlessly at her coffee trying hard to fight tears that were
threatening to spill over the confines of her eyes.
‘I
want you to do that for me, for a lifetime, not just this one, but for as many
number of times I am born, Marry me, will you?’ he said and saw her tears finally
leaving her eyes but tagging a faint smile along with them.
Written
for Five Sentence Fiction for the prompt - Marriage
Wow... how cute!! Adorable FSF!!
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DeleteAwwesome!!
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DeleteAw, sweet :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Lisa :)
DeleteNot the ending I expected, very well done!
ReplyDeleteD.B. McNicol
Romance & Mystery...writing my life
Glad you liked it Donna :) Welcome to my space :)
DeleteProposal ahem ahem Jyotsna...... A beautifully woven proposal
ReplyDeleteLOL. Thanks Sharad :)
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ReplyDeleteThank you Ankur :)
DeleteAwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.... :)
ReplyDeleteThat's a sweet one, Jyotsna! Unexpected and very, very cool!
ReplyDeleteThank you Beloo :) :)
DeleteReally cute! He sounded like such a nag at the start...but turned out to be a darling in the end :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Vinodini. Wish people were such darlings ;)
DeleteHe brings tears into her eyes and then proposes her. Lover's tiff.
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Deleteawwwwwwwwwwww what a way to propose
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Bikram
waah ... ek amar prem gatha :p
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DeleteHow romantic.. With a twist!!
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Thanks Debi :)
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Hey Priya. Thank you so much for the award :) :)
DeleteOh that was so sweet! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Seeta :)
DeleteThat was such a cute story ! Brat that rahul is :)
ReplyDeleteHe sure is ;)
Deletetears tagging a faint smile- a lovely new phrase you invented there :)
ReplyDeleteEven I liked this phrase...cute story Jyotsna :)
DeleteThanks Ritesh and Bushra. Glad you liked this one :)
DeleteCute!!
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:):)
Delete5 sentences! Well, enjoyed reading it. Almost a fairy tale ending. Happily ever after!
ReplyDeleteYep. Happily ever after !!
DeleteAwww... But a bit too much sugar for my taste :P
ReplyDeleteLOL. I know.. Not your taste babes ;) :P
DeleteAwww...so lucky she is! Very well written indeed! :D
ReplyDeleteShe sure is. Thanks Amrita :)
DeleteYep. Thanks for dropping by dear :)
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