Friday, 30 May 2014

Five Sentence Fiction - Marriage


‘Why are you looking so pissed off?’ she said trying to fathom the reason behind his cranky behavior since past half an hour sitting at their favourite restaurant.

‘It’s you who does that to me’ he replied with a stern face looking straight into her eyes.

‘Yes, You! you keep me awake with your phone calls late into the night, your messages keep on popping up on my cell every now and then, your incessant chatter when we meet, and then your stupid ways of making me smile when I am down, and I have to drink all that distasteful soup of yours that you make whenever I am sick, and how can I forget those handmade gifts that you make me for no reason inspite of telling you a hundred times to not spend sleepless nights for making those gifts, but you just won’t listen.’ He said in one breath as if the words were just bursting inside him.

‘Rahul, I just do that to..’ and her sentence trailed off with a lump in her throat and she looked mindlessly at her coffee trying hard to fight tears that were threatening to spill over the confines of her eyes.

‘I want you to do that for me, for a lifetime, not just this one, but for as many number of times I am born, Marry me, will you?’ he said and saw her tears finally leaving her eyes but tagging a faint smile along with them.   


Written for Five Sentence Fiction for the prompt - Marriage


59 comments:

  1. awwiieee that was sooo sweet :) Loved this write up :)

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    1. Glad you liked it Donna :) Welcome to my space :)

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  3. Proposal ahem ahem Jyotsna...... A beautifully woven proposal

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  4. Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.... :)

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  5. That's a sweet one, Jyotsna! Unexpected and very, very cool!

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  6. Really cute! He sounded like such a nag at the start...but turned out to be a darling in the end :)

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    1. Thanks Vinodini. Wish people were such darlings ;)

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  7. He brings tears into her eyes and then proposes her. Lover's tiff.

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    1. Kind of. Thanks for dropping by Kalpana.

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  8. awwwwwwwwwwww what a way to propose

    beautiful...


    Bikram

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  9. waah ... ek amar prem gatha :p

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  10. How romantic.. With a twist!!

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  11. Awe. Very nice and with a good twist. Good writing!
    Deb@ http://debioneille.blogspot.com

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  12. Hi Jyotsna,
    happy to inform that i have nominated you for the Liebster award :) Congratulations and keep rocking!
    http://pencilstripes.blogspot.com/2014/06/the-first.html

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    1. Hey Priya. Thank you so much for the award :) :)

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  13. Oh that was so sweet! :)

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  14. That was such a cute story ! Brat that rahul is :)

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  15. Cute story :-) Very romantic :-)

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  16. tears tagging a faint smile- a lovely new phrase you invented there :)

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    1. Even I liked this phrase...cute story Jyotsna :)

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    2. Thanks Ritesh and Bushra. Glad you liked this one :)

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  17. 5 sentences! Well, enjoyed reading it. Almost a fairy tale ending. Happily ever after!

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  18. Awww... But a bit too much sugar for my taste :P

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    1. LOL. I know.. Not your taste babes ;) :P

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  19. Awww...so lucky she is! Very well written indeed! :D

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