Monday, 24 February 2014

That wasn't what I meant - 33 words

Dejected and weary
I look up at the sky
Laden with a heavy sigh
‘Can it get worse?’ I cry
You took it as challenge
Poured all your strength
But trust me, Life
That wasn’t what I meant




This week’s prompt from Trifecta  was to add 33 words in addition to and preceding the following prompt: ‘That wasn’t what I meant.’

38 comments:

  1. I sometimes wonder if HE is misunderstanding me too.
    He only gives you what you can handle, or so they say.

    nice take on the prompt, thoughtful.

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    1. HE seems to be misunderstanding a lot of people, I guess. Thanks for visiting Kir. Glad you liked my take :)

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  2. That's the worst, when you think you've already hit rock bottom and POW! Life says, "You ain't seen nothing yet!" Great job with the prompt.

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    1. Yeah, seems like it Ashley.. Thank you and glad you liked it :)

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  3. Such a poignant interpretation of the prompt.

    Damyanti
    Co-host, A to Z Challenge 2014

    Twitter: @damyantig
    #atozchallenge

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  4. For some reason, this made me smile. Yes weird but I smiled.

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  5. You have no idea how many times I asked life the same question and been misunderstood.

    Well life takes it as a challenge, I guess we should too!

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    1. I swear, when would life understand it was not a challenge !!

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  6. This is really cool. Not just the rhythm, but the overall message. Very well played! Thanks for sharing!

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    1. Glad to have put this up !! Thanks for the visit :)

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  7. Man do I know that feeling. Terrific poem!

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    1. Oh yes, feel the connection ;) Thanks kymm :)

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  8. Amazing. I guess happiness comes when you're not paying too much attention or not asking for it. Or maybe happiness actually means less troubles

    Updated my blog. Do drop by.

    Cheers
    CRD

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    1. Well, happiness is open to interpretation for all. Thanks for dropping by and off to read yours :)

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  9. But life does throw up challenges. A lovely poem, Jyotsna.

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    1. It sure does Kalpana.. at times when we least expect it to. Glad you liked this :)

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  10. It seems to be Murphy's Law for life to hit us like that!! Especially when we are being sarcastic. Brilliant take! ♥

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    1. Haha.. Yes, life takes Murphy's Law pretty seriously, I guess ;) Thanks Kathy :)

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  11. Good writing. That's life sometimes.

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    1. Yeah, that's life sometimes. Sigh ! Thanks for the visit :)

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  12. Life really does seem to enjoy an ironic challenge now and again. Your take on the prompt really resonated with me.

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    1. I am sure Life also laughs mockingly at us when we are in the middle of 'what-the-hell-is-happening' ;)

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    1. Troy, hope that 'Amen' was for me getting out of those challenges :P

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  14. I hope it was still manageable...I read this somewhere once...when we fear all is lost, the tide will turn

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    1. Hey Sini, welcome to my space. What a beautiful line you have mentioned here! Hope the tide turns in favour for all of us out here.

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  15. All I want to say is that tomorrow will be a better day. That's life :)

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    1. Yes Khushboo - good and bad, ups and downs.. part of life.. Thanks for dropping by !!

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  16. Ooof, I hate that feeling, when all you can do to respond is to shake your fist and say, "Seriously?! This too?!?" Great job capturing that.

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    1. I swear how I hate that feeling too.. Thanks for the visit :)

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  17. When it can't get worse, it always does. But, again, it really couldn't get any more worse, right?
    I also liked how this rhymed a bit. Read well.

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    1. Yes, it always always happens that way. Sigh !! Thank you Renada and glad you enjoyed my rhymes :)

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  18. We certainly all have times we'd like to recite this poem. Well done!

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    1. Yes, speaking from experience ;) Thank you for dropping by Alicia :)

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